Thursday, February 2, 2012

anaphora poem

Be what you desire,
Be what you believe in,
There is absolutely nothing you can’t achieve,
Never hold back your dreams,
Follow them and ride them like streams,
Never be shy, never be sly,
Just live how you wish,
Until you die,
Be what you desire,
Be what you believe in.
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7 comments:

  1. kristinrocheFebruary 2, 2012 at 5:41 PM

    This is so positive. Great job. Instead of the commas, you should consider some periods and maybe even stanzas.

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  2. JakeFebruary 3, 2012 at 5:39 AM

    This is a very good poem, shortness notwithstanding. You have some very witty rhymes in there.

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  3. Dan TFebruary 3, 2012 at 5:50 AM

    Amazing. 2 thumbs and all that. That "until you die" part kinda brings the thing down to sadness though in what is otherwise a totes optimistic poem.

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  4. Alex M.February 3, 2012 at 5:51 AM

    Good message. Good rhymes. Only the word "sly", in my opinion, could be changed to a word that better fits your theme.

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  5. RaquelFebruary 3, 2012 at 5:52 AM

    Very positive, good advice for everyone. I would uses cannot instead of can't.

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  6. Xx Brackenclaw xXFebruary 3, 2012 at 6:00 AM

    Good ryhmes, very positive.

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  7. Adam214February 3, 2012 at 6:09 AM

    Very good positive message over all.

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